Monday, September 10, 2007

Be Your Own Editor 09

Question: How would you revise the following ten-minute essay?

Answer: Compare your revisions with mine in tomorrow's blog. This exercise is not Sudoku, but it does sharpen your ability to express your ideas more smoothly and accurately.

Original
..........With the 1992 Olympics drawing near, the United States is preparing for the gold medal. Take basketball for example, the United States has not won a gold medal in several years. This has the top ranking basketball officials quite upset.

All the best. Ray S.

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